She walks in the street to find her next victim, her latex jeans are so tight and her fat pussy lips are showing a great Camelot. Every step she take make her pussy more horny and she needs to feed very soon.
Her swaying hips are now in front of a boy. He just starring at her big sexy Camelot, but he don't know that this pussy is a cruel killer.
Before he knows she open the zipper in her pants and her pussy open wide and showing the fanged vagina. She now force his head in her vagina and snapped of his head.
She pull the zipper back again and starts to walk away.
On the ground the rest of the boy laying without the head.
Kinda of odd, you should of described the boy more, it seemed one second you meet him, then you decapte him...
Apr 25, 2011 Rating
Lurid and Poetic by: Ed the Editor
Clearly, English is not your native language (unless you're one of my students who slept through class LOL). Get someone fluent to edit your work.
You have a tight, poetic style that I admire, but you need to expand on the boy character.
Keep it concise (I'm sure you will), but make him real enough so that his death has more impact. Though there are major technical problems with your writing, your creativity and the nice hook at the end earn 3 stars from me.
Feb 23, 2011 Rating
crazy by: eternity
dude that was totally wack!! crazy for more!!
Feb 13, 2011 Rating
hot by: Joy
Hmmmm.... some kind of alien here? Sexy and hot...
Plz more
Dec 05, 2010 Rating
wow by: Anonymous
i want more of this type of stories. Please write more very soon.